From now until March 1, 2005 SAVE $10 on all EssayEdge services. Simply use coupon code 33333 when placing your order. Visit http://www.essayedge.com today and Give Yourself an Edge!
College Admissions Essay Secrets
EssayEdge.com contains thousands of pages of free admissions essay advice by Harvard-educated editors.
Each year, Harvard rejects four out of five valedictorians and hundreds of students with perfect SAT scores, leaving applicants and parents wondering what went wrong. While there is no secret formula for gaining admission to a top school, there are many ways to ensure rejection, and the most common by far is taking the admissions essay lightly.
Over one-third of the time an admissions officer spends on your application is spent evaluating your essay. Admissions officers use the essay to compare hundreds or even thousands of applicants with similar grades, activities, and SAT scores. To stand out, your essay must not only demonstrate your grasp of grammar and ability to write lucid, structured prose, you must also paint a vivid picture of your personality and character, one that compels a busy admissions officer to accept you.
Fortunately, unlike every other aspect of the application, you control your essay, and can be sure that the glimpse you give the admissions committee into your character, background, and writing ability is the most positive one possible.
TOP 10 ESSAY WRITING TIPS
1. Do not Thesaurusize Your Essay. Do Use Your Own Voice. Admissions officers can tell Roget from an 18-year-old high school senior. Big
words, especially when misused, detract from the essay, inappropriately drawing the reader's attention and making the essay sound contrived.
Before: Although I
did a plethora of activities in high school, my assiduous efforts enabled me
to succeed.
After: Although I juggled many activities in high school, I succeeded
through persistent work.
2. Don't Bore the Reader.
Do Be Interesting. Admissions officers have to read hundreds of essays, and they must
often skim. Abstract rumination has no place in an application essay. Admissions
officers aren't looking for a new way to view the world; they're looking for a
new way to view you the applicant. The best way to grip your reader is to begin
the essay with a captivating snapshot. Notice how the slightly jarring scene
depicted in the "after" creates intrigue and keeps the reader's
interest.
Before: The college
admissions and selection process is a very important one, perhaps one that
will have the greatest impact on one's future. The college that a person will
go to often influences his personality, views, and career.
After: An outside observer would have called the scene ridiculous: a
respectable physician holding the bell of his stethoscope to the chest of a
small stuffed bear.
3. Do Use Personal Detail.
Show, Don't Tell!
Good essays are concrete and grounded in personal detail. They do not merely
assert "I learned my lesson" or that "these lessons are useful
both on and off the field." They show it through personal detail.
"Show don't tell," means if you want to relate a personal quality, do
so through your experiences and do not merely assert it.
Before: I developed a
new compassion for the disabled.
After: The next time Mrs. Cooper asked me to help her across the
street, I smiled and immediately took her arm.
The first example is vague and could
have been written by anybody. But the second sentence evokes a vivid image of
something that actually happened, placing the reader in the experience of the
applicant.
4. Do Be Concise. Don't Be
Wordy.
Wordiness not only takes up valuable space, but it also can confuse the
important ideas you're trying to convey. Short sentences are more forceful
because they are direct and to the point. Certain phrases such as "the fact
that" are usually unnecessary. Notice how the revised version focuses on
active verbs rather than forms of "to be" and adverbs and adjectives.
Before: My
recognition of the fact that the project was finally over was a deeply
satisfying moment that will forever linger in my memory.
After: Completing the project at last gave me an enduring sense of
fulfillment.
5. Don't Use Slang, Yo!
Write an essay, not an email. Slang terms, clichés, contractions, and an
excessively casual tone should be eliminated. Here's one example of
inappropriately colloquial language.
Well here I am thinking
about what makes me tick. You would be surprised. What really gets my goat is
when kids disrespect the flag. My father was in 'Nam and I know how important
the military is to this great nation.
6. Do Vary Your Sentences
and Use Transitions.
The best essays contain a variety of sentence lengths mixed within any given
paragraph. Also, remember that transition is not limited to words like nevertheless,
furthermore or consequently. Good transition flows from the
natural thought progression of your argument.
Before: I started
playing piano when I was eight years old. I worked hard to learn difficult
pieces. I began to love music.
After: I started playing the piano at the age of eight. As I learned to
play more difficult pieces, my appreciation for music deepened.
7. Do Use Active Voice
Verbs.
Passive-voice expressions are verb phrases in which the subject receives the
action expressed in the verb. Passive voice employs a form of the verb to be,
such as was or were. Overuse of the passive voice makes prose seem
flat and uninteresting.
Before: The lessons
that prepared me for college were taught to me by my mother.
After: My mother taught me lessons that will prepare me for college.
8. Do Seek Multiple
Opinions.
Ask your friends and family to keep these questions in mind:
Have I answered the question?
Does my introduction engage the
reader? Does my conclusion provide closure?
Do my introduction and
conclusion avoid summary?
Do I use concrete experiences as
supporting details?
Have I used active-voice verbs
wherever possible?
Is my sentence structure varied,
or do I use all long or short sentences?
Are there any clichés such as
cutting edge or learned my lesson?
Do I use transitions
appropriately?
What about the essay is
memorable?
What's the worst part of the
essay?
What parts of the essay need
elaboration or are unclear?
What parts of the essay do not
support my main argument?
Is every single sentence crucial
to the essay? This must be the case.
What does the essay reveal about
my personality?
9. Do Answer the Question.
Many students try to turn a 500-word essay into a complete autobiography. Not
surprisingly, they fail to answer the question and risk their chances of
attending college. Make sure that every sentence in your essay exists solely
to answer the question.
10. Do Revise, Revise, Revise.
The first step in an improving any essay is to cut, cut, and cut some more.
EssayEdge.com's free admissions essay help course and Harvard-educated editors
will be invaluable as you polish your essay to perfection. The EssayEdge.com
free help course guides you through the entire essay-writing process, from
brainstorming worksheets and question-specific strategies for the twelve most
common essay topics to a description of ten introduction types and editing
checklists.
About EssayEdge.com - EssayEdge.com offers all users free access to the most extensive Admissions Essay Help Course on the Internet and over 300 Free Sample Admissions Essays accepted by the United States' top undergraduate, graduate, and professional programs. Named "the world's premier application essay editing service" by the New York Times Learning Network and "one of the best essay services on the Internet" by the Washington Post.
